I know where I have gone wrong and how I can correct it

A sixth edit of your novel, are you mad? This time it will be complete re-write. Yes, every word will be re-typed. I need to take it away from the writing desk, into more intimate spaces, such as the terrace, and the perch by the window. Writing, sitting at a desk, makes us dogmatic, didactic._ Lindsay:So [...]
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Sharilyn:
As her job is now further away from where she worked I help her with taxifare and if she did ask me to I would have helped with buying food for her daughter who lives in another city with her family.
(25 September 2016)

Evelin:
How not to be Camera shy?
(25 September 2016)

Evelin:
When I get on video or Photoshoot I tend to get nervous and tense up.
(25 September 2016)

Yuri:
Do you believe in the mandela effect?
(25 September 2016)

Yuri:
Example: Berestein Bears is actually the Berestain Bears.
(25 September 2016)

Yuri:
The Mandela Effect is a theory of parallel universes, based in the idea that because large groups of people have similar alternative memories about past events.
(25 September 2016)

Jennine:
So there s this guy that ive liked for the past year and a half but i feel like ive been getting mixed signals. (WARNING: long!!)?
(25 September 2016)

Jennine:
I asked for his number and snapchat and suggested that he come by my work so i dont know if he just is being friendly or if its something more.
(25 September 2016)

Jennine:
Also whenever he is around his other friends its like i dont exist and i feel like ive always made the first move.
(25 September 2016)

Jennine:
Whenever we do text it always takes him about 10 minutes to respond.
(25 September 2016)